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Some consumers are increasingly choosing to buy goods that are produced in their local area, rather than imported goods. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or anegative trend?

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Nowadays, some customers prefer to purchase
a
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locally produced
goods
instead
 of imported
products
. I vehemently agree with
this
 statement, as
this
 scenario could not only be beneficial for
individual's
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an individual's
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finanicial
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financial
 situation but
also
 seems beneficial for the progress of any country.
To begin
 with, there are myriad benefits behind
this
 trend why people
going
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 for local brands. First and foremost
is
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, whenever consumers buy local
goods
, it will
contributes
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 more
in
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 improving the Gross Domestic Product. Gross Domestic Product is an indicator which shows the gross income
which
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that
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 any country can gain by selling and exporting
products
. To illustrate, consumption of locally produced
goods
 will encourage local
businessess
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businesses
 to elevate their business size and
aquire
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acquire
 more adequate resources.
Consequently
, supported
nation
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nations
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 can earn more revenue and use that money on the development of infrastructure.
For instance
, in Japan, after
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second world war
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, people avoided
various
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importing
products
 and focussed on local produce.
However
, the quality was not comparable but after some time, Japan became one of the strongest economic
power
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powers
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 in the world.
In addition
, by supporting local
products
, customers can save more money as these
goods
 are not
much
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 expensive.
Therefore
, less
finanicial
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financial
 burden on them, which
further
 leads to a happy and blissful life.
Apart from
this
,
this
 approach can decrease the impact on
environment
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the environment
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 because they usually need less
tranportation
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transportation
results
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resulting
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 in less carbon footprint. In conclusion, more consumption of local
products
 appeared to be a beneficial trend in terms of any nation's revenue and less
finanicial
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financial
 burden on individuals.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon footprint
  • local economy
  • job creation
  • transportation time
  • preservatives
  • additives
  • cultural heritage
  • traditional methods
  • import taxes
  • shipping costs
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