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The map below shows the development of the town of Stromer between 1995 and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The map below shows the development of the town of Stromer between 1995 and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The map illustrates the changes
of
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 the town called Stromer between 1995 and the present time. In 1995, it can be
seen
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 lots of green areas and there was one big farmland on the south side of the city. Only 2 blocks of houses were placed in 1995.
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, there was only one shop
at
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 the centre of the town. The figure shows just one main road through Stromer in that year.
On the other hand
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,
it is clear that
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 there are
lots
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lot
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 of development in the city
according to
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 the map. The farmland
on
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 the south is smaller in the present day.
Likewise
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, the forests have been smaller since 1995. It can be said that the population is higher because of the new blocks of
aparments
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apartments
were
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 built.
Moreover
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, there are more shops and there is a
scholl
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school
at
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 the centre of the town. On the north-east side, an airport is shown
in
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on
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 the map these days.
Furthermore
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, the road has lots of branches which reach all the structures.

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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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