You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in a country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words
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The bar charts illustrate the proportion of genres of movies released and the all amount of ticket
sales
in the years
1996 and 2006 in random country
.
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countries
Overall
, it is clear from the graphs that the percentage of the
films Correct article usage
apply
realased
in 1996 was less than after one decade Correct your spelling
released
releases
. Change preposition
of releases
Moreover
, of course, this
also
impacted to
ticket Change preposition
apply
sales
and had more per cent of sales
in the year 2006.
In 1996, drama had the biggest percentage at nearly 25% and this
number incresed
to 35% after ten Correct your spelling
increased
years
. Additionally
, comedy was the less significant genre with 20% and it also
presented grow
up to exactly a quarter in 2006. Fantasy movies Replace the word
growth
was
twice Change the verb form
were
Rephrase
as smaller
smaller
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small
that
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apply
it
and had approximately 12% and 15%, in the Correct pronoun usage
apply
years
1996 and 2006, respectively. For romance, percentage
was the same for both Add an article
the percentage
years
at about 7%.
The biggest sales
of tickets showed the
comedy at roughly 23% and Correct article usage
apply
this
was 20% in the year 1996. Drama was also
main
one with around 16% in 1996 and 17% in 2006. Fantasy and Change the article
the main
romace
had not so Correct your spelling
romance
more
ticket Correct quantifier usage
many
sales
and had almost 3% and 5%, in 1996, sequentially. For fantasy it went up to nearlty
7%Correct your spelling
nearly
,
but for Remove the comma
apply
romace
Correct your spelling
romance
in
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it
deacreased
to almost 2%.Correct your spelling
decreased
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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