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The table below shows the prices of a cup of coffee in 6 cities in Australia in 2010 and 2014.

The table below shows the prices of a cup of coffee in 6 cities in Australia in 2010 and 2014.
The table sheet below demonstrates the cost of a single cup of coffee in some
Australia's
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of Australia's
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 regions between 2010 and 2014.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the range of changes in these cities during
this
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 period
are
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is
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 between %4.5 and %9.5.
According to
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 the table, the biggest difference
of
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in
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 prices over these years referred to Melbourne, which increased substantially from $3.15 to $3.45 in 2010 and 2014 respectively.
In addition
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, the lowest changes belonged to Canberra and Adelaide together
that
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which
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 raised %4.5.
Although
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,
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apply
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 Sydney
has
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had
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 the minimum price in 2010, it went up
until
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to
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 $3.35.
furthermore
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, Perth
To sum up
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, it can be clearly seen that all cities in Australia witnessed changes during
this
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 period.
the
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apply
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most of them referred to Melbourne and the lowest referred to Canberra and Adelaide together.

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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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