The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the steps involved in the manufacturing of
bricks
for the building industry.
Overall
, the process begins by digging out
clay
from the ground, which is
then
processed, put into moulds, and
then
passed through various chambers. It is
finally
packaged and sent out for delivery.
Bricks
are made of a special type of sticky soil called
clay
, which is dug out by a digger.
Firstly
, the
clay
is passed through a metal grid onto a roller.
Secondly
, sand and water are added to the
clay
, which is
then
cut into brick-like cuboids, which are
finally
put into moulds to get the desired shape. The raw
bricks
are
then
put in a drying oven for 24 to 48 hours. They are
further
transferred to another chamber which has three compartments, two of which are kilns, the first has a moderate temperature ranging between 200 to 980 degrees Celsius,
while
the second maintains a high temperature between 870 to 1300 degrees Celsius, and the third compartment is the cooling chamber. After being baked in the kilns, they are cooled for 48-72 hours.
Finally
, the
bricks
are ready for packaging and are delivered to their requested sites. In conclusion, making
bricks
is a long process, and it takes a few days to make the final product from soil.
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