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The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.
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The graph
presnts
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presents
 changes in the amount of of goods transported in the UK categorized by the means of transportation (road- water- Rail- pipeline) through a period of 28
years
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 from 1974 to 2002.
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, the largest quantities of products
was
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were
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 moved
in
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to
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 the UK
was
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by using the road for
all
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apply
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the time period.
According to
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 the data, the
amont
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amount
of
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apply
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of goods transported
through
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by
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the
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road increased slightly from 70
million
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tonnes
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 to 90
million
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tonnes
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through
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over
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the
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apply
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28
years
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.
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, the quantities of merchandise moved
through
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by
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 sailing
in
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by
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 water rose
steadly
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steadily
 over the same period, reaching around 60
million
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tonnes
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.
furthermore
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, the number of goods transported by train experienced a varied
patren
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pattern
patron
, starting with
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a peroid
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peroid
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period
periods
 of stability at 40
million
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tonnes
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 from 1974 to 1979,
then
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 a slight fluctuation between 30 to 40
million
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tonnes
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 from 1979 to 1997. After
that
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 it returned
steady
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steadily
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 at 40
million
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tonnes
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 for the
last
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 5
years
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.
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, moving products
throurgh
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through
 the pipeline
icreased singificantiliy
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increased significantly
 by 20
million
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tonnes
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 in
first
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the first
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 ten
years
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 and
the
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remained
reletively
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relatively
 unchanged at approximately 20
million
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tonnes
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 for the following
years
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.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Transported goods
  • Quantities
  • Trends
  • Modes of transport
  • Rail
  • Road
  • Water
  • Pipeline
  • Fluctuations
  • Predominance
  • Economic influences
  • Societal changes
  • Technological advancements
  • Environmental impact
  • Growth
  • Steady increase/decrease
  • Comparison
  • Period (e.g., decade, years)
  • Examination
  • Implications
  • Analysis
  • Conclusion
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