The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six

areas of the world.
The charts give information about the proportion of
water
used for different
purposes
in six
areas
around the world. Looking from an
overall
perspective, in most
areas
water
used
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is used
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for agricultural uses,
however
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however,
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in some
areas
most
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popular purpose of
water
use is industrial. In South America, Africa, Central
Asia
and South East
Asia
the percentage of
water
used for agricultural uses had
most
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significant share at least 70%.
Additionally
, in these
areas
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areas,
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water
used for industrial
purposes
ranged between 5% and 12%.
Furthermore
, in Central
Asia
and South East
Asia
water
used for domestic
purposes
is at
same
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level at 7%.
In contrast
, the proportion of
water
used for industrial uses in North America and Europe had the largest share at around 50%,
however
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agricultural uses of
water
stood at 39% and 32% respectively.
Water
used for domestic
purposes
in these
areas
roughly
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at
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15%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, purposes, areas, asia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • irrigation
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • regional disparity
  • economic structure
  • sustainable management
  • water-scarce
  • population density
  • urbanization
  • data trends
  • resource allocation
  • percentage distribution
  • extremes
  • variations
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