The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
The charts give information about the proportion of
water
used for different purposes
in six areas
around the world.
Looking from an overall
perspective, in most areas
water
used
for agricultural uses, Add a missing verb
is used
however
in some Add a comma
however,
areas
most
popular purpose of Add an article
the most
water
use is industrial.
In South America, Africa, Central Asia
and South East Asia
the percentage of water
used for agricultural uses had most
significant share at least 70%. Correct article usage
the most
Additionally
, in these areas
Add a comma
areas,
water
used for industrial purposes
ranged between 5% and 12%. Furthermore
, in Central Asia
and South East Asia
water
used for domestic purposes
is at same
level at 7%.
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the same
In contrast
, the proportion of water
used for industrial uses in North America and Europe had the largest share at around 50%, however
agricultural uses of Add the comma(s)
however,
water
stood at 39% and 32% respectively. Water
used for domestic purposes
in these areas
roughly
Add a missing verb
is roughly
at
15%.Change preposition
apply
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