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Task 1: The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Task 1: The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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given
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bar chart depicts the quantity of time in
minutes
 spent on
telephone
 calls in local, national and international, and mobile types between 1995 and 2002.
Overall
,
while
 mobile and national and international calls rose over
this
 period, local calls peaked at some
event
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events
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 and decreased steadily on the other half of the graph. Mobile phones, including all calls, started
its
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their
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 growth from almost zero
levls
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levels
 in 1995 and moved upwards steadily until 1999, reaching 14
billion
 calls.
Subsequently
, it jumped
dramaticaly
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dramatically
 in
minutes
 of calls in
remaining
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the remaining
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 part of the given time, striking its highest point at 45
billion
 calls in 2002. In comparison,
although
 fixed lines of national and
internatioanl
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international
telephone
 calls started at
greater
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a greater
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 number of
minutes
 (
near
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nearly
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 40
billions
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billion
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) at the beginning of the period,
it
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they
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 did not grow as intensely as mobile
telephone
 calls did:
it
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they
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 increased steadily and peaked at over 60
billion
 calls in the end. Local calls, comprised of fixed lines, distinguished from others by showing
negative
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a negative
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 trend and
to be
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being
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 the most frequently used
telephone
 call type even
at the end
 of the given time. It climbed to 90
billion
minutes
 in 1999 steadily, and it fell dramatically until the end, reaching its lowest point
70
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of 70
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billions
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billion
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 in 2002.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes, telephone, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number of minutes
  • telephone calls
  • categories
  • local – fixed line
  • national and international – fixed line
  • mobiles
  • general trend
  • yearly totals
  • significant changes
  • milestones
  • data
  • rise significantly
  • decline
  • steady increase
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • exponential growth
  • over the period
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