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The bar chart below shows the international student enrolments at three universities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the international student enrolments at three universities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the
number
 of international
students
 enrolled from 5 various countries at
University
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the University
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 of Smithtown,
University
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the University
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 of Riverview, and
University
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the University
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 of Earlwood.
Overall
, it is apparent that Riverview
University
 has the highest
number
 of international
students
 from all
the
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five countries out of all the named universities. Regarding
University
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the University
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 of Smithtown, it has more Indian
students
 compared to
Earlwoood
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Earlywood
 by 6,000
students
; whilst, Earlwood
University
 has higher numbers
in
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of
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students
 from both Vietnam, reaching
for
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3,000
students
, and Colombia, only just under 1,000
students
.
Moreover
, both universities have
equal
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an equal
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number
 of
students
 from Nepal and Indonesia
by
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4,000 and 1000 respectively. Turning to
University
 of Riverview,
having
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has
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 the most international
students
 from all the countries, India, Nepal, Vietnam, Indonesia, and Colombia. Their highest
students'
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students
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number
 was from India
by
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with
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 around 7,500
students
,
while
 their lowest was from Colombia
by
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with
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 only just 1,000
students
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, students, university with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enrolment trends
  • steady increase
  • fluctuating enrolments
  • international student numbers
  • comparative analysis
  • favored choice
  • global economic conditions
  • admission policies
  • program offerings
  • student satisfaction
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