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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates
average
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the average
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 weekly consumption of money in different categories in 1968 and 2018. Units measured by percentage.
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, there are up-down trends in housing, transport and leisure.
On the other hand
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, there are falling trends in food, fuel and power, garments, and personal goods. To closer look, the most significant function was spending money weekly on food,
this
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 figure declined from 35% per
cent
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 to just over 15% per
cent
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. Weekly using money on fuel and power, clothing and footwear and personal production ratios were
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 decreased 4% per
cent
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, 5% per
cent
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 and 3% per
cent
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 respectively from 1968 to 2018. Given the 50-year period, accommodation, transport, and amenities ratios increased by approximately 12% per
cent
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, 5% per
cent
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 and 14% per
cent
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 respectively. There is only one figure remains constantly given the period.
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 figure was for household goods and in both years its ratio remained just over 5% per
cent
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratios" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • spending patterns
  • allocated
  • weekly income
  • significant changes
  • essential items
  • food
  • housing
  • clothing
  • leisure
  • communication
  • increase
  • decrease
  • twofold rise
  • substantial increase
  • quadrupling
  • declined
  • food and drink
  • slight increase
  • prioritizing
  • necessities
  • transitioned
  • portio
  • non-essential items
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