The figure illustrates annual amounts of three household devices sold in Asada shop. Summarize the given information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The given diagram shows the
sold out
number of Add a hyphen
sold-out
Hair
dryer
, Iron and Fix the agreement mistake
dryers
Vacuum
cleaner
in a shop Fix the agreement mistake
cleaners
of
Asada between 2001 and 2010. Change preposition
in
Overall
, it is clear that
the most sold devices are Hair
dryers.
Considering Iron and Vacuum
cleaner
, Fix the agreement mistake
cleaners
initially
, their purchased numbers were at the same position, around 250. Furthermore
, by 2004, the amount
of Change the quantifier
number
Vacuum
cleaners sold peaked at about 350, while
the quantity of Irons sold experienced steady
. Correct article usage
a steady
Moreover
, sales of Irons decreased to around 190, but then
it saw dramatic
increase hitting a high of about 500. Eventually, there was no significant increase or decrease in the number of Correct article usage
a dramatic
Vacuum
cleaners purchases except some
fluctuations over the period.
In regard to Change preposition
for some
Hair
dryer
, in 2001, it bought over 550 Fix the agreement mistake
dryers
Hair
dryers from the Asada shop. Furthermore
, the number of Hair
dryers sold had rocketed to approximately 950 in 2006, but then
this
trend saw an incremental decrease until the end of the period with some fluctuations.Submitted by writingiletschecker on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hair, vacuum with synonyms.
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