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The line graph below shows the number of students enrolled in four different courses at a university from 2017 to 2022. Summarize the given information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the number of students enrolled in four different courses at a university from 2017 to 2022. Summarize the given information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the number of undergraduates
participated
Correct pronoun usage
who participated
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courses
Change preposition
in courses
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such
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 as Introduction to Economics, Management, Finances and Accounting and Digital Marketing between 2017 and 2022.
Overall
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,
number
Change the article
a number
the number
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 of students
got
Correct pronoun usage
who got
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 into Digital
marketing
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Marketing
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 and Introduction to Economics increased,
while
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 Finance and Accounting and Management experienced some fluctuations. First of all, the enrollment of Introduction to Economics slightly increased before it reached its peak in 2020,
whereas
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 the number of students enrolled
to
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on
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 Digital Marketing rose gradually. In terms of, Management students
fall
Wrong verb form
fell
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 steadily to 100 in 2019
,
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apply
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 and climbed to around 250 in 2020. In regard to Finances and Accounting considerably declined over 50 in 2019 and substantially grew to approximately 100 in 2022.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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