The graph compares employment rates in three sectors of the economy, in the UK, 2000-2010

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The given line graph depicts the

rate

of employment in three sectors of the economy in the UK, over a decade between 2000 and 2010. It can be seen

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that, Private

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, Private

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the private

sector

had

highest

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the highest

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employment

rate

in 2000. And, it decreased over a ten-year period.

However

, after 10 years

Public

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the Public

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sector

had

highest

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the highest

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employment

rate

. In the first 3 years Public

sector

remain stable at approximately 38. After

that

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that,

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there was considerable change until 2005 to over 45. And, in 2006 it had

small

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a small

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increase.

Next,

until 2010 Public

sector

increased slightly to just over 50.

Self-employed

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The self-employed

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sector

had a similar line

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Correct article usage

the

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Public

sector

. It

start

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started

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probably at 18, until 2004 fluctuated between 18 and 20.

Subsequently

, from 2004 to 2010 it grew significantly to 30.

Finally

, the

last

one is

Private

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the Private

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sector

. If we compare it with other sectors, it decreased

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by more

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than half.

Private

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The private

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sector

starts at 45 and

dropped

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drops

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dramatically to 20. In 2010

Public

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the Public

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sector

had

highest

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the highest

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rate

, after which

Self-employed

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the Self-employed

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sector

and the lowest

rate

had

Verb problem

was

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Private

Correct article usage

the Private

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sector

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words rate, sector with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
20Grammar mistakes
 

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173 words

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Clear and correct grammar

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The graph compares employment rates in three sectors of the economy, in the UK, 2000-2010

Many people choose to travel abroad to learn a foreign language instead of studying in their home town . What are the advantages and disadvantages of this ?

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