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The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in the whole world and in different parts of the world. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make the comparison where relevant.

The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in the whole world and in different parts of the world. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make the comparison where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates differences in the number of inhabitants that
lives
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 in metropolitan areas across 5 continents and the world as a whole at 3 different times. All in all, the number of population experience an upward trend, but different continents affect
this
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increase
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 in different amounts.
Africa
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 influences
least
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the least
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 on the general graph,
while
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 North
America
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 affects
most
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the most
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. In-depth,
Africa
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 and
Asia
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 almost follow similar percentages during the period.
Africa
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 started with 15% and
Asia
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 began with 17% in 1950, trailed by a rapid
increase
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 in 2007 when
Africa
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has
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reached 37% and
Asia
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climbed up to 41%. By 2030, it is estimated that
Africa
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 will hit 51% and
Asia
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 will peak at 54%.
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, Europe was 51%, Latin
America
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 was 42% and North
America
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 was 64% which was the most in 1950. Afterwards, Europe and North
America
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has
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encountered a rapid
increase
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 in 2007 when they
have become
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were
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 72% and 79% respectively.
On the other hand
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, from 1950 to 2007, Latin
America
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 has confronted a dramatic rise of 34% which has been the most
increase
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 in amount. Between the years 2007 and 2030, it is assumed that there will not be a big difference. Europe, Latin
America
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 and North
America
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 will soar slightly by reaching 78%, 84% and 87% respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words increase, africa, america, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rapid" was used 2 times.
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