ou recently saw an advertisement about a business conference that can be helpful for your work. Write a letter to your manager asking permission to attend the conference. In your letter, say: what the conference is about how you know about the conference explain to him/her why it is important that you attend this conference You should write at least 150 words.

Dear
sir
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Sir
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or
madam
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Madam
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, I am writing
this
letter to
ask
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ask to
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tell about the conference meeting
that is
held on
this
upcoming
sunday
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Sunday
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. I was amazed when I
show
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saw
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an advertisement
about
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for
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business
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a business
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conference and that's why, I am asking permission to attend
this
event
. It is one the biggest
event
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events
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where I will have a chance to get
knowledges
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knowledge
pieces of knowledge
bits of knowledge
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and
informations
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information
pieces of information
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about the current business scenario and
also
, will get in touch with new
contact which
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contacts who
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can be helpful for my
work
. Because one of my
friend
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friends
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attended
this
event
last
time and got knowledge about the market which helped him a lot
on
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in
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his job, he suggested
me
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I
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to
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apply
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become
the
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apply
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part of
this
type of conference. As we are going to
work
on
new
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the new
a new
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foreign project, I would like to join
same
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the same
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event
from where I can get
work based
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work-based
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information which will help me to
work
effectively. Kindly approve my decision and permit me to attend
this
meeting. Yours Faithfully, Ankit Patel
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task achievement
Ensure to proofread your letter for minor grammatical errors and typos, such as ‘ask tell’ which should be ‘ask’ or ‘tell’ and ‘I show’ which should be ‘I saw’.
coherence cohesion
Organize the content more clearly by dedicating a single idea to each paragraph, this will enhance the logical flow of the text.
task achievement
The letter successfully explains what the conference is about and why it is important to attend.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing of the letter are appropriate and polite.
task achievement
The writing tone is suitable for a formal request to a manager.

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