The graph shows the percentage of people in 4 age groups who visited the cinema once a month or more between 1984 and 2003.

The graph shows the percentage of people in 4 age groups who visited the cinema once a month or more between 1984 and 2003.
The line graph provides data about percentages of individuals who visited the cinema once a month or more from 1984 to 2003. The visitors are separated into 4 different groups
according to
their age.
Overall
, it can be seen that the highest percentages belong to youth generations,
while
the lowest to older.
To begin
with, in 1984 there were just under 5 % of people aged 35 and over. The figure decreased to zero % in 1988. It has experienced an increase to 10% in 2002. The per
cent
race to just over 10 in 2003. Regarding people aged 25-35, there were 5 % of visitors in 1984. It grew significantly to just under 20 % in 1997. It faced a crash to just under 20 per
cent
in 2000.
Then
it grew incredibly to just under 30 per
cent
in 2002. It faced with a drop to 25 % ,and
then
race to 30 in 2003. Regarding people aged 7-14, there were 10 % in 1984. It has experienced a considerable growth to 30 per
cent
in 2000. It dropped to 25 % in the next year.
Then
there was an increase to just over 40 % in 2002. Regarding adults aged 15-24, in 1984 there were just under 20 % of watchers,
while
in 1996 the point rose to just under 50 % with several fluctuations. It has experienced an incredible crash to just under 40 %, and
and
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race to 55 % in 2003.
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