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The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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In contrast
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 to the line graph given below, we can observe the percentage of
exports
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 from
Australia
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 to the major four
countries
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 Japan,
US
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the US
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,
China
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 and India.
Furthermore
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,
according to
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 the data the comparison is between
percentage
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the percentage
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 of
exports
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 vs the
year
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.
For instance
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, we can observe
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last
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the last
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 two
decades
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decades'
decade's
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exports
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 from
1990s
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the 1990s
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 to 2012. In
this
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 era of
industrial
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the industrial
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 revolution,
countries
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 are focusing towards more and more
exports
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 to improve their economy.
Now a days
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Nowadays
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 it has become very crucial to maintain the
exports
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 of goods and transportation communication
medium
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mediums
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.
From the
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The
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 data provided in the line graph
is showing
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shows
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 us the trendline of the exported materials from
Australia
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 to various other
coutries
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countries
.
Firstly
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, we can easily spot the top most exported country in the
year
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 1990 was Japan with a staggering amount of 26% but that trendline has gradually decreased to secure the second most spot among exporting
countries
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 by the end of the
year
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 2012.
As a result
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 of that,
China
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 increased
it's
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its
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exports
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 to secure the
top most
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topmost
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 spot from being the
lowest ranked
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lowest-ranked
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 exporting country by the end of the
year
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 2012.
In addition
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 to that, the
exports
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 to both the
countries
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 US and India are
on
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in
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 the third and fourth position from 2005 onwards. Despite all the difficulties encountered by the
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exports
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export
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 industry of
Australia
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, they have increased their
exports
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 and production drastically from the
year
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 2000 onwards. To sum things up all the data given in the line graph, we can conclude that the
overal
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overall
exports
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 from
Australia
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has
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have
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 been increasing
year
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 by
year
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 but the most beneficial country is
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china
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China
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 and after
gradual
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a gradual
the gradual
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 decrease
of
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in
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exports
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 towards other
countries
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 by
Australia
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 has made it possible to increase production towards
China
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 more and more.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words exports, australia, countries, china, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • percentage
  • fluctuate
  • steady increase/decrease
  • notable rise/drop
  • peak
  • trough
  • comparative analysis
  • export destinations
  • trade relations
  • upsurge
  • downturn
  • economic ties
  • exponential growth
  • over the period
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