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You want to throw an event in a prestigious restaurant, inviting a number of people to it. Send an e-mail to the manager enquiring about the facilities and services.

#event #restaurant #people #e-mail #manager #facilities #services
Dear Madam Brown, I am one of your customers and writing
this
 letter in order to ask some question about your menus and services as I intend to hold a small party in your place for celebrating my wedding anniversary on the October 10th.
According to
 my invitation list, I have some guests who are vegetarian
thus
this
 question arises; do you have some cuisines which are herb-based and contain some vegetables
such
 as green beans, carrots and eggplants or do you just serve meat-oriented meals? Because I cannot find
such
 items in your menu.
Additionally
, an extra charge should be paid ,in some restaurants, for reservations and serving cake;
dose
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such
 action include your place or not ? I have approximately 22 guests; I cannot inform you about the precise number until
a
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 night before the mentioned day
thus
 is there any problem with
this
 issue?
Furthermore
, is there any free wi-fi and children's playground available?
Finally
, my
last
 question is about the payment method; should be there some prepayment for the booking or can I pay it totally through my credit card
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that night
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 these questions are effective in my decision; I am keenly looking forward to your response. Respectfully, Shaghayegh Shadman.
Submitted by shaghayegh95shadman on

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language
Aim for a more precise and polished language. This will ensure a more professional tone and avoid small grammatical errors.
structure
Consider including a brief conclusion summarizing your questions and emphasizing the importance of the information to your decision.
content
Clear communication of key information such as date, number of guests, dietary requirements, and service details.
language
Professional and polite tone appropriate for a formal email.

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