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The first chart shows the population of England and Wales between 1700 and 2000. The second chart gives information about the birth and death rate in the same countries in the same period.

The first chart shows the population of England and Wales between 1700 and 2000. The second chart gives information about the birth and death rate in the same countries in the same period.
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The graphs
depicts
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 the population figures,
birth
 and
death
 rate of England and Wales between 1700 and 2000.
Overall
,
it is clear that
,
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 the population increased throughout the given
period
 and the
highiest
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highest
 rates of
birth
 and
death
 were recorded in 1800. At the
begining
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beginning
 of the
period
, in 1700, there were just under 10
million
 people in these countries which was the lowest of the given
period
. These figures continued to increase in 1900 almost doubling that figure of 1800 which was approximately 15
million
 to just under 40
million
.
This
 trend continued to the end of the
period
 when these two nations had the most lives
of
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about 50
million
. As
of
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for
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birth
 and
death
 rates, there
was
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were
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 just under 10
million
 shown in 1700. Meanwhile, in 1800, most
birth
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births
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 and
death
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deaths
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 were
recored
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recorded
 with an estimation of 24 and 16
million
 respectively. There was not much difference
on
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in
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 the number of
birth
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births
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 in 1900 and 2000 with both years showing numbers below 15
million
. For
child
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childbirth
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birth
, 1900 had about 8
million
 newborns
while
 the least child delivery was in 2000, set at nearly 5
million
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words birth, death, period, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 3 times.
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