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‏The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second ‏chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

‏The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second ‏chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.
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The first chart illustrates the proportion of Australian households in six types of energy use. The second chart depicts the percentage of Australian household greenhouse gas emissions.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that heating had the highest energy use;
whereas
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, cooling was the lowest. Water heating was the largest amount.
however
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, cooling was seen the fewer. Observing the pie charts in more detail, the figure for energy consumption by heating was the highest proportion with around 42%. Water heating was the second accounting for almost 30%. Followed by other applicants and refrigeration accounting for approximately 15% and 7% respectively. Another point to be noticed is that water heating in gas emissions was more than lighting with 8%.

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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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