You have been working with your company for two years and are interested in a promotion. Write a letter to your direct boss. In your letter: · Explain your varied achievements over the past two years · Express your interest in growing with the company · Ask for a meeting to discuss a potential promotion

Dear Sir, I am writing
this
letter to bring your attention towards my achievements that helped the
company
to achieve lucrative profits in yester years. I am hoping to receive the promotion in my position as I
had
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been working with
this
organization
from
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a long period of time .
Furthermore
, I never
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back to work even during the weekends or the times when
company
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was facing
recession
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a recession
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in
market
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.
Additionally
, I always looked myself to
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forward with the growing stairs of the
company
. I was working 24/7 for its better growth and to meet its targets. Being a supervisor, I tried to bring my team together and make
best
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efforts to make higher profits. I have been observing the manager
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a long term and learnt numerous
stratergies
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strategies
to maintain the team and work cooperatively. I would be obliged if you could spare some time for me to arrange a meeting with you in the cafeteria. As the manager of my department is
retairing
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retiring
retaining
soon,
thus
, I wanted to talk about
this
position and my promotion. I will put my best efforts to take the
company
to
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of its heights. Waiting to hear from you soon. Yours sincerely, Navneet Kaur.
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To improve coherence and logical structure, consider organizing your letter into clearer paragraphs with distinct ideas. Each paragraph should introduce a new point or aspect of your achievements and goals.
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Ensure you proofread your letter for minor grammatical errors and inconsistencies, such as 'stratergies' and 'retairing' which should be 'strategies' and 'retiring'.
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Use more formal language and a professional tone consistently throughout your letter to improve cohesion and suitability of the writing tone.
coherence cohesion
Your letter contains a clear structure with a greeting and closing, establishing a respectful and professional tone.
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You clearly outline your achievements and express your desire to grow within the company, addressing the task requirements directly.

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