Some people prefer to relax by doing physical activities, while others choose mental activities such as crossword puzzles or chess. Discuss the both views and include your own opinion.
It is important to unwind after a long duty. Some individuals choose physical
activities
for
relax rather than other people who prefer Change preposition
to
brain
activities
such
as puzzles or playing chess. From my perspective, it Change the verb form
depends
depend
person to person, because the Add the preposition
depend on
method
of relaxation are different for everyone. I will support my opinion with arguments in the essay below.
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methods
To begin
with, its
a viable option for some Replace the word
it's
it is
human
to play Fix the agreement mistake
humans
real time
Add a hyphen
real-time
games
to relax after hard duty. For example
, playing football, cricket, tennis etc have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
fundamental
Add an article
a fundamental
affect
on our Replace the word
effect
body
. Additionally
, Games
plays
a significant role in our lives. Correct subject-verb agreement
play
Its
not Correct pronoun usage
It
just
makes us healthy and fit but Rephrase
only
also
makes us active for next
day. Correct article usage
the next
Hence
, i
wholeheartedly believe thatChange the capitalization
I
,
physical Remove the comma
apply
activities
is a great thing to relax.
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activity
Secondly
, Mental activities
such
as playing games
, which includes
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include
brain
work not
Add the comma(s)
, not
body
. Furthermore
, this
not only boost
our memory strengthChange the verb form
boosts
,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
makes us to
make quick decisions. To Change the verb form
apply
illustrates
, chess is an ancient game, Correct subject-verb agreement
illustrate
greatest
kings play these Correct article usage
the greatest
games
to expand their brain
memory, so they can think broadly. On the other hand
, according to
many researchers, puzzle
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puzzles
is
not only good for Correct subject-verb agreement
are
adloscents
but Correct your spelling
adolescents
also
for adults
mental health. So, Change noun form
adults'
adult's
active
by Replace the word
activity
brain
is Add an article
the brain
important
as Rephrase
as important
active
by Replace the word
activity
body
.
In conclusion, some are tired by Add an article
the body
brain
rather than Add an article
the brain
body
, so it depends on the person. WhetherAdd an article
the body
,
physical Remove the comma
apply
activites
suit them or mental Correct your spelling
activities
activity
activities
. Activities
are imporant
, no matter its a physical or mental.Correct your spelling
important
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vocabulary
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conclusion
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