The line graph shows the birth rate, population growth rate and death rate from 1940 until 2020 in Scotland. The three different veriables are measured in percentages

The line graph shows the birth rate, population growth rate and death rate from 1940 until 2020 in Scotland. The three different veriables are measured in percentages
The line graph provides information about demographic trends
of
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Scotland between 1940 and 2020. There are three variables which are birth
rate
, population growth
rate
and death
rate
.
It is clear that
all the variables are experiencing a decreasing trend. First and foremost,
birth
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the birth
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rate
experienced a significant fluctuation during the period. It had a
steap
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steep
decline from approximately 2.5% in 1940 to 0.5% in 2020.
Simiarily
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Similarly
,
rate
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the rate
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of death
also
displayed an almost similar pattern over time until 2000. It decreased from 1.5% to roughly 0.3% during the period.
Whereas
, it stayed stable for the next 10 years and
then
started to increase gradually since 2010. Taking a closer look
in
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the graph, we can see that
growth
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the growth
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rate
of the population
also
fell after the rise between mid
1940s
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mid-1940s
and
mid 1950s
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mid-1950s
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. It reached a peak at a figure of 1.5% in around 1955 and saw the most notable decline over 50 years. After
mid 2000
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mid-2000
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, we cannot see any population grow.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words rate with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • birth rate
  • death rate
  • population growth rate
  • percentage
  • fluctuation
  • trend
  • peak
  • decline
  • stabilize
  • demographic
  • interrelate
  • historical events
  • social policies
  • economic conditions
  • healthcare advancements
  • variable
  • measured
  • decade
  • significant
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