High job demands, stress and sense of commitment are among the main reasons people go to work when they are ill. This way they accomplish important tasks, but may infect others or get some serious health problems themselves. In your opinion should people go to work if they are sick? Support your point of view with relevant examples from your knowledge or experienc
Nowadays,
the
stress or the commitment to a job are the principal reasons of sick people Correct article usage
apply
attending
their workplace. In Wrong verb form
attend
this
way, they can get their task done and do not put in
Change preposition
at
risk
their position in their job. However
, this
result
in a Fix the agreement mistake
results
loss
of productivity of that worker
and most important
can become a health Replace the word
importantly
risk
for the coworkers.
Firstly
, a
ill Change the article
an
worker
can not fullfil
their duties in the same way that a healthy Correct your spelling
fulfil
worker
. The sick employee will be in distress and as a result
, the attention to the detail of that worker
will be less. Also
, in some risk
professions, this
will become a safety breach that can result in job accidents. For example
, a sick lorry driver can be distracted by the pain or the distress, resulting in a truck accident, involving injured victims and loss
of money in reparations for the victims and loss
of ware.
Secondly
, going to work beeing
sick can become a public health issue Correct your spelling
by being
in
a fast pace, spreading diseases among Change preposition
at
the
coworkers. A classical example of Correct article usage
apply
this
is a worker
with influenza in an enclosed space like a
office. Change the article
an
This
worker
can spread the disease among the other people in the workplace, and as if that were not enought
, the coworkers can infect their own families, spreading the infection out of the Correct your spelling
enough
working place
to their own homes.
In conclusion, going to work Correct your spelling
workplace
beeing
sick is a Correct your spelling
being
risk
for the ill worker
and the people who works
among that Change the verb form
work
worker
. Resulting in loss
of productivity of that worker
that can become a lost
of money for the company. Replace the word
loss
Also
can be a health problem among the workers of the place, that
can be infected by Correct pronoun usage
who
the
Change the word
their
coworker
, resulting in Fix the agreement mistake
coworkers
spreading
Correct article usage
the spreading
the
disease among the population.Change preposition
of the
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grammar
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examples
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