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The chart below gives information about the household percentage of spending on essential goods in China for the years 1995 and 2011 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about the household percentage of spending on essential goods in China for the years 1995 and 2011 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate the annual spending of
household
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households
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 on crucial goods in
China
 between 1995 and 2011.
Overall
, it can be seen that there were 4 types of spending including
food
, clothing, medicine and household goods.
Food
 buying accounted for the highest percentage of total
outcome
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outcomes
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both
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in both
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 1995 and 2011 in
China
. In 1995, every family in
China
alocated
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allocated
located
 their money for
food
 consumption. Approximately 68% of
family's
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a family's
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 revenues
spent
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are spent
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 on paying
various
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for various
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 types of
food
.
In addition
, in the second place, there was clothing which contributed roughly two to ten of
total
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the total
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 outcome.
By contrast
, slightly below 5% of annual revenue was used for
medicine
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medical
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 purposes. During 2011, more than half of expenditures in
China
was
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were
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 spent
for
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on
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foods
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food
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 followed by clothing with
proportion
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a proportion
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roughly
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of roughly
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 18%.
Whereas
, similar trends happened for medicine and household stuff with
precentage
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percentage
 11% and 12% respectively,
also
 these became the smallest spending of citizens in
China
 .
However
,
this
trends
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trend
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 increased compared with 16 years ago.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words china, food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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