The best way to deal with the rising problem of traffic and transportation is by encouraging people to live in cities rather than in suburbs and in the countryside. What are the effects of rapid population growth in the city? How can the quality of life of city dwellers be maintained?

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population
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massive concern nowadays. Some of them
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that dwellers tend to live in
cities
ratherthan
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rather than
living in
suburbs
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the suburbs
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and countryside.
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increasing
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in
cities
can
causes
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to
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numoures
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rumours
issues in
cities
. In
this
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will discuss the
deterimental
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detrimental
effects and
a
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apply
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feasible measures to tackle
this
challenge. One of the significant
concern
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concerns
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about
rising
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the rising
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of
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population
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the population
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is that leads to
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an incresing
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incresing
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increasing
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number of
homeless
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the homeless
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community
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communities
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. To be more precise, when
population
has brought the accommodations likely to be inadequate
such
amount of
people
since many of the
people
needd
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need
needed
to stay outside the houses like
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roadsides where they have to face various
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challenges
challanges
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challenges
such
as threaten from robbers, likely to be infected by
diseaes
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diseases
disease
and many more. The best way to eradicate
this
issue is
renowation
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renovation
of
infrasructure
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infrastructure
of the
cities
. In
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,
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
should
make
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take
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some measures to develop
the
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urban planning in
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way. If
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
doing
such
works
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that
immplemented
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is implemented
to curb
this
issue .Singapore is the country
that is
the best example to tackle
these kind
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of
problem
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problems
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, they implemented the best
plannig
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planning
and that
was
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helped to manage the overpopulation.
Furthurmore
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Furthermore
, the next obvious concern of
rising
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the rising
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density of
people
is
that
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increasing crime rates. When
people
are crowded criminals have
a
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oppourtunity
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opportunity
to
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criminal activities
such
as pickpocketing , gold thefts and robberies. To solve
this
problem
goverment
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government
should take some
immidieate
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immediate
actions
such
as fixing security cameras and
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the army force in the
cities
. if they do that these crime
rates
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rates are
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likely to be
reducing
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reduced
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.
To conclude
, overpopulation
is
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massive effects
to
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on
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the dwellers who are living in
cities
such
as rising homeless
people
and higher
the
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crime rates. To tackle these issues
govermebt
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government
should be
doing
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taking
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some measures
such
as urban
plannig
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planning
and
tighten
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tightening
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the security system.
Thus
,
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
should
implement
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take
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immediate action
otherwise
which
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it
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become
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becomes
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a huge problem for future generations.
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