The top priority of businesses is making money, and they do not need to have social resposibilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

The highest
puprose
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purpose
of businesses is profit without possessing social
responsibilities
. I strongly
dissagree
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disagree
with
this
statement and,
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think that social
responsibilities
have to be considered. To start with, companies have to think about difficulties and how that business will affect
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society. If they will only concentrate on wealth, they could miss new customers
due to
the
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of actions.
For example
, a mature person went to the vape shop, and when he appeared, he noticed that
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are quantity of teenagers
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smoking. The man did not like that scene and exited
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shop
due to
the fact that
this
store brings harm to young individuals.
Also
, when police will know about vape sailings to the under
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aged people, the store will get a huge penalty.
Furthermore
, businesses that do not avoid
responsibilities
have a
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image for customers. Companies can make more money by the right actions and behaviour of employees. These workers attract more customers and
recieve
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receive
loyalty, and it can lead to long-term profitability.
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an
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instance, someone's wife has
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desire to purchase
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ring, and when she
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in to
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the
jewelry
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store, the seller
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polite with her and
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beneficial recommendations. These actions
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liked by
woman
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and she started to recommend
this
boutique to her relatives and buddies.
To sum up
, associations prioritize making more money without giving attention to
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public
responsibilities
. I cannot agree with
this
notion and,
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believe that every firm has to possess social concern.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial stability
  • economic activity
  • public image
  • customer loyalty
  • ethical obligation
  • environmental degradation
  • regulatory compliance
  • legal penalties
  • investor trust
  • consumer base
  • innovation
  • sustainable practices
  • profitability
  • exploit
  • retain employees
  • job creation
  • unemployment rates
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