The charts below show the percentage of water used for diffrent purposes in six areas of the world.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for diffrent purposes in six areas of the world.
The charts provide the proportion of
water
which is used for three different purposes namely industry,agriculture,and
domestric
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domestic
in six different regions in the world.
Overall
it is clear that
North America and Europe are the biggest
user
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for
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industry,
whereas
other
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six countries use more
water
for
agricultural
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.The domestic use
comperative
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comparative
lowest in every country.
To begin
with farming, Central
Asia
is the
higher
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user
with 88%.
Also
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Africa, South East
Asia
,and South America are the higher
user
with 84%,81%,and 71% respectively. As to industry, 53% of
water
is used in
Europe-much
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Europe
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higher than
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in other
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other
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,and 48%
of
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in
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North America.
By contrast
, Central
Asia
use
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5%
water
, which is the
lower
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lowest
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. Regarding
to
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domestic, here we see every country
are
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the
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a
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much
less
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lower
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user
of
water
with 9% of Africa, first
higher
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apply
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whereas
7%
water
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of water
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used in Central
Asia
and South East
Asia
respectively.
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