The charts below show the percentage of water used for diffrent purposes in six areas of the world.
The charts provide the proportion of
water
which is used for three different purposes namely industry,agriculture,and domestric
in six different regions in the world.
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domestic
Overall
it is clear that
North America and Europe are the biggest user
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users
for
industry,Change preposition
of
whereas
other
six countries use more Correct article usage
the other
water
for agricultural
.The domestic use Replace the word
agriculture
comperative
lowest in every country.
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comparative
To begin
with farming, Central Asia
is the higher
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highest
user
with 88%. Also
Africa, South East Add a comma
Also,
Asia
,and South America are the higher user
with 84%,81%,and 71% respectively.
As to industry, 53% of water
is used in Europe-much
higher than Correct your spelling
Europe
Change preposition
in other
other
,and 48% Fix the agreement mistake
others
of
North America.Change preposition
in
By contrast
, Central Asia
use
5% Change the verb form
uses
water
, which is the lower
.
Regarding Correct word choice
lowest
to
domestic, here we see every country Remove the preposition
apply
are
Unnecessary verb
apply
the
much Correct article usage
a
less
Fix the agreement mistake
lower
user
of water
with 9% of Africa, first higher
Correct word choice
apply
whereas
7% water
used in Central Change preposition
of water
Asia
and South East Asia
respectively.Submitted by mdtipusultanakhand on
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