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The graph below shows the regional household recycling rates in the UK, France and Germany from the years 2005-2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the regional household recycling rates in the UK, France and Germany from the years 2005-2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant.
The line chart illustrates the percentage of regional household recycling rates in three countries between 2005 and 20015. The figure
of
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for
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 Germany grew from 20% to approximately 50% from 2005 to 2015. In
France
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France,
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 there was a moderate fall from 50% to 30% over the first eight
years
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, after the figure rose sharply until 2015, when it reached 40%.In the
UK
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 before there was a slight growth over the first two
years
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, the shape remained stable over the next two
years
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. The line of the
UK
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 rose steeply, after which there was a slight increase
at the end
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 of the period when it reached a peak of 60%.
Overall
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, The
UK
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 and Germany totally increased
during
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in
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 10
years
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except
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except for
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 France
that
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which
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 decreased
through
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over
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a
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the
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 period.
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 the figure for France ranked in
first
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the first
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 5
years
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, it was
over taken
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overtaken
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 by
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UK
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the UK
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 towards the end of the period.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • regional household recycling rates
  • overall trend
  • significant increase
  • steady rise
  • fluctuations
  • marginal decline
  • notable drop
  • peak
  • trough
  • comparative analysis
  • year-on-year growth
  • data patterns
  • rate of change
  • noteworthy milestones
  • disparities
  • environmental policies
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