You have recently started a job in a new company.Write a letter to an English speaking friend. In your letter, - Explain why you changed the job - Describe your new job - Tell him/her your other news

Dear Mandeep, How are you? I want to tell you about my new
job
that
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statred
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started
this
month.
Firstly
, you know that
i
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was working in Canadian Tire as a packer.
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the
starting
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of
year
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the year
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,
i
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was
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have been
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looking for
new
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a new
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job
in my nursing profession.
Last
month
i
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applied
in
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to
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dynacare
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Dynacare
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and they called me for
interview
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an interview
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and
finally
i
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got
job
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the job
a job
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.
Secondly
,
i
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feel very lucky that
i
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got my dream
job
as a
labortary
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laboratory
assistant. The location of work
also
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apply
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near to house
as well as
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the timing
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of
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the shift
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shift
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shifts
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also
perfect for my schedule. Well,
i
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am very happy now as
i
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told you two months ago
i
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am really struggling to find a
job
. I am very
gald
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glad
and thankful to God because my dream come
to
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true.
Lastly
,
i
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have
many
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more news that
i
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wanna to
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told
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tell
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you. The one is
greatest
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news about my sister now she got her work permit and
i
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cleared my G2
in
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on
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second
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attempt.
Additionally
, when we meet next time
i
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will definitely
pickup
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pick
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you
from
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up from
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airport
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the airport
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. Hope so you will be happy and
i
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Can't wait to meet you. Lots of love, Harpreet
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Coherence and Cohesion
Consider using more paragraph breaks to enhance readability and flow.
Task Achievement
Work on minor grammatical errors and capitalization issues, like 'i' instead of 'I' and 'labortary' instead of 'laboratory'.
Task Achievement
You've covered all the essential points: why you changed the job, what the new job is like, and other news.
Task Achievement
Your letter has a warm and personal tone, which is very suitable for a letter to a friend.
Coherence and Cohesion
Good use of opening and closing remarks that suit the context of an informal letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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