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The chart below shows the proportions of the world’s oil resources held in different areas, together with the proportions consumed annually in the same areas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the proportions of the world’s oil resources held in different areas, together with the proportions consumed annually in the same areas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given data depicts the differences between
oil
resources
 and
its
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their
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consumption
 in the world, which
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are devided
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devided
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divided
 into ten country groups. The groups are
Middle
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the Middle
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 East, Canada, Central and South America, Eastern
Europe
, Africa, Asia, The United States, Western
Europe
, Australia and New Zealand, and
other
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others
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. It can be seen from the graph that
Middle
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the Middle
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 East has the greatest number of
oil
resources
. Even though
,
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apply
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 Canada is
on
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in
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 the second position, its
oil
resources
is
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are
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 no more than a quarter from
Middle
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the Middle
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 East. Meanwhile, Asia, The United States, and Western
Europe
 are
on
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in
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 the top three for
the
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apply
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annual
oil
consumption
. The
oil
resources
 in
Middle
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the Middle
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 East and Canada are 56.52% and 14.84%, respectively. Their
oil
consumptions
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consumption
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are
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is
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 much lower than it, which is
on
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apply
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6.15% and 2.48%.
On the other hand
, those top three countries are
contrast
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in contrast
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from
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with
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 it, where Asia is
on
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in
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 the top position for
the
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apply
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consumption
. Its
oil
consumption
 reaches 26.21%
while
they
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it
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 only
have
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has
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 2.89%
resources
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of resources
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.
However
, there are some groups that have similar
oil
usages
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usage
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 and productions,
such
 as Central and South America and Eastern
Europe
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words oil, resources, consumption, middle, europe with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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