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The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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, it is evident that the
frequency
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 of fast
food
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 purchases in the USA has undergone a considerable downturn over the past ten
years
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.
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, the change reveals the dietary habits of
people
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 have changed from high-calorie ingestion to a healthy lifestyle. From the bar chart, it is evident that most fast
food
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 intake is concentrated once a
week
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 and once or twice a month. First and foremost,  the modification remained almost the same in these two frequencies in 2003.
Subsequently
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, the
frequency
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 of fast
food
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 eating once a
week
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 reached a top note of over 30%.
However
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, after seven
years
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, the
frequency
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 of fast
food
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 consumption was transformed to once or twice a month, with a proportion of approximately 34%. Moving to other
frequency
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 rates of consuming quick-served
food
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 every day and never eating, both experienced a similar pattern from 2003 to 2013.
People
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 ate fast
food
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 from nearly 5% daily, dropping almost half to 2.5% in the
last
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 ten
years
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.
Likewise
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,
people
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 who had never had fast
food
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 intake accounted for 5%
initially
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, falling to under 5% in 2013. It is noticeable that even though these frequencies were under 5%, minimal change still can be observed as time goes by. The
last
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 two
frequency
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 categories did not show a dramatic fluctuation over the ten
years
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. The proportion of
people
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 who visited fast
food
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 restaurants several times a
week
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 did not exceed 20%.
While
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 the number of
people
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 who dined at fast
food
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 stores a few times a
week
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 saw the slightest soar,
afterward
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, remained unchanged after the year 2006.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words frequency, food, years, people, week with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fast food consumption
  • dining frequency
  • decade overview
  • trend analysis
  • to dine out
  • fluctuation
  • sharp increase
  • gradual decline
  • eating habits
  • statistical comparison
  • consuming pattern
  • noteworthy change
  • anomaly
  • periodic comparison
  • data interpretation
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