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The charts below give information on the ages of the population of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The charts below give information on the ages of the population of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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A glance at the provided pie charts reveals a series of alternations and projections in the ages of the populations of
Yemen
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 and Italy in the
years
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 2000 and 2050. It is evident that the
population
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 of
Yemen
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 consisted of
people
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 under the age of 59 in 2000 and experienced minimal change throughout the following 50
years
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.
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, the rapid development of Italy accelerated the composition modification of the
population
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.
Furthermore
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, the elderly will comprise the majority of the future of society in Italy. The
population
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 of
Yemen
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 demonstrates how young the country is.
People
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 over 60
years
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 old accounted for 3.6% in 2000, growing slightly to the percentage of 5.7 in the projection of 2050. Teenagers and middle-aged
people
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 will experience a considerable increase in the prediction for the following 50
years
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, from 46.3% to 57.3%. Meanwhile, the number of
people
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 under 14
years
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 old will decline drastically to 37%. Moving to the
population
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 of Italy, the
labor
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labour
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 force of the country is predicted to plummet sharply from 61.6% to 46.2% between 2000 and 2050.
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, the elderly will boom from the beginning of one-fourth to occupy a quarter of the
population
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.
However
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, It is noticeable that the predictive number of
people
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 under 14
years
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 old has diminished merely from 14.3% to 11.5%.
To conclude
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, in the projection of a 50-year period, Italy will transform into an older-predominated society.
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, the workforce of
Yemen
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 is undergoing a considerable rise simultaneously. Yet, both countries will experience a decrease in birth rate and a growth in the older
population
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words yemen, years, population, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "considerable" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • age distribution
  • population demographics
  • projected
  • projections
  • notable changes
  • demographic changes
  • implications
  • birth rates
  • life expectancy
  • senior citizens
  • young population
  • working-age population
  • dependency ratio
  • aging population
  • socio-economic impact
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