The table below describes the number of employees and factories in England and Wales from 1851 to 1901. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The table below describes the number of employees and factories in England and Wales from 1851 to 1901.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The table shows how many
employess
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employees
and
factories
were established in England and Wales
in
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from
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1851 until 1901.
Overall
, the total
employees
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number of employees
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decreased significantly.
In contrast
, the number of
factories
showed oppositely where it had risen
for
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almost 3 times in 1901 compared to
previous
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the previous
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50 years. On the one hand, the total employees in England and Wales were almost 500 thousand people in 1851 which was mostly dominated
from
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by
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male
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males
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with around 290 thousand employees.
However
, it decreased dramatically until reached the bottom in
early
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the early
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1900s with merely 60 thousand people and had almost the same proportion between males and females.
On the other hand
, despite the number of
employes
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employees
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went
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going
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down, the number of
factories
rose dramatically from not more than 230
factories
in 1851 until it reached
for
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apply
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almost 3 times in 1881 with more than 720
factories
.
However
, it
had
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slightly decreased by around 120
factories
in the next 20 years and reached 600
factories
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words factories with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.

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