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The charts below give information about the number of hours that students study each day at five different universities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing Task 1

The charts below give information about the number of hours that students study each day at five different universities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing Task 1
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These
cherts
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charts
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 give some
informations
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information
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 about
hours
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the hours
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spend
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spent
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 per day by
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the student
a student
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student
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students
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 for the study comparing five universities and the first
one
 focuses
in
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on
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 a period of
internal
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the internal
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 day of the week
while
 the second
one
on
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is on
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the weekend
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weekend
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weekends
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. These
datas
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data
dates
 underlined a
redution
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reduction
 of
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the quatity
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quatity
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quantity
quality
 of time used on
weekend
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weekends
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 rather than on weekdays.
Although
 there are some differences, all the students of the five
univercities
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universities
 studied less
in
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at
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weekend
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weekends
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, especially the
last
 two where
hours
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the hours
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 per
days
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day
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 are almost six.
While
 on weekdays comparing
studytime
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study
 in each university is very similar, almost
students
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all students
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 studied 10
hours
 per
days
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day
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.
However
 the first and the second
one
 suffered little from
this
 reduction in fact for the first
numbers
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number
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 of
hours
 are
separeted
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separated
 from less than sixty minutes and the second decreased
exactly
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by exactly
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of
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apply
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one
 hour and
half
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a half
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.
At
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 the
end
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 the third that had the best quantity
in
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on
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 weekdays became third for
hours
 per
days
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day
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in
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at
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 the
weekend
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, one, weekend with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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