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The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.
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In
this
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 era of technological advancement, exporting
goods
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are
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is
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 the
signs
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sign
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 of a developing economy.
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Goods
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Good
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transportation
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 and exporting various materials
provides
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provide
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 us with a lot of insights about a country.
Firstly
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,
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this
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the
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 below chart provides us with insight
about
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into
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 the transported
goods
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 in
UK
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the UK
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 between 1974
to
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and
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 2002 by four different methods.
For example
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, here four different modes of
transportation
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is
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are
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 involved i.e road,
water
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, rail and pipeline.
According to
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 the given data,
goods
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transportation
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 in the year 1975 via road was considered to be more
convinient
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convenient
.
Furthermore
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, the
transportation
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 of
goods
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 via
water
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 has been steady since 1975.
In addition
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 to
this
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 pipeline
goods
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 transfer started in the year
of
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apply
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1975 and increased dramatically between
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the year
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year
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years
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 1975 to 1985. Among all other modes of
transportations
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transportation
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,
goods
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 transfer via railway is making a good amount of impact and has been more
convinient
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convenient
. From 1975 to 1980 there was
steady
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the steady
a steady
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 mode of transferring
goods
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 via road and
water
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.
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However
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However,
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 the
water
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 mode
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transportation
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of transportation
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 became more popular and
become
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became
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 the second most
choice
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common choice
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 for the UK economy by
1980s
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the 1980s
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words goods, transportation, water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "provides" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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