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The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The map shows Garlsdon
town
 including the two possible sites where the new supermarket is going to be.
Overall
, the
town
 of Garlsdon has a massive industrial area with the
town
 centre
at
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in
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 the middle and
a
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apply
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residential zones on both sides of that area.
As well as
 a main road to Hindon in the north, Bransdon in the west, and Cransdon to the east, and a railway going from
northern
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the northern
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 west side of
town
 to
southern
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the southern
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 east side. The first possible location is going to be
at
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in
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 the countryside,
at
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in
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 the
north-west
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northwest
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 of
town
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the town
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, just 12
kilometers
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kilometres
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 from Hindon inhabitants. The industrial land is closer to the site than the housing area;
in addition
 to the railway. Regarding the second site, it is projected to be in the
town
 centre
at
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in
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 the middle of the industrial zone, not too far from the housing
on
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 the south compared to the northern housing.
Moreover
,
this
 site is
nearby
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near
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 the main road to both Branson's and Cransdon's citizens.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • map
  • town
  • supermarket
  • site
  • overview
  • possible
  • transportation
  • access
  • surrounding
  • facilities
  • population
  • density
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