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The bar charts below show the prevalence of obesity among boys and girls aged12 to 19 years by ethnicity, in the United States for the years 2004 and 2014. Summariseinformation by selecting and reporting the main features, andamake comparisons where relevant.

The bar charts below show the prevalence of obesity among boys and girls aged12 to 19 years by ethnicity, in the United States for the years 2004 and 2014. Summariseinformation by selecting and reporting the main features, andamake comparisons where relevant.
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The bar depicts the
obesity
 percentages by ethnicity among teenagers of both genders aged from 12–19, in the US, in the
year
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years
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 2004 and 2014.
Overall
, in 2004 and 2014
the
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apply
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obesity
 was highest in
non-Hispanic
 Black and lowest in
non-Hispanic
 White.
To begin
, the percentage of
obesity
 was at
peak
Correct pronoun usage
its peak
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 (29%) in 2014 in
non-Hispanic
 Black boys and girls,
whereas
 the
least
Correct word choice
lowest
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 number of
adolescents
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adolescent
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having
Unnecessary verb
apply
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obesity
 in the
year
 2014 was
non-Hispanic
 White (14%).
Moreover
, the Hispanic ones are having moderate
obesity
 (17%) in 2014.
Similarly
, the major
youngsters
Correct quantifier usage
number of youngsters
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 suffering from
this
 medical condition were
non-Hispanic
 Black (6%) in 2004, which was the most significant percentage recorded
this
year
.
However
, the minor ones were
non-Hispanic
 White (9%), which was the only percentile under 10%.
Furthermore
, 12% of the teenagers were Hispanic
who
Correct word choice
and
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are having
Wrong verb form
were obese
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obesity
 in the
year
 2004.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words obesity, year, non-hispanic with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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