The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections untill 2030.

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections untill 2030.
The graph provides data on a 2008 report about the consumption of
energy
which was consumed in the USA between 1980,and 2030.
Overall
it is clear that
petrol and oil were the
leader
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of
energy
,
while
coal and natural less popular than
pertol
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petrol
and oil.
By contrast
, hydropower is the least
uses
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used
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energy
.
To begin
with, the consumption of petrol and oil stood at 35QU in 1980, which was the higher than
other
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others
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,
fluctuated
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and fluctuated
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till 1995.
Then
it will increase in 2030. Coal and natural gas started at 20Qu and 15Qu and crisscrossed and overlapped
untill
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until
2020. They will increase 23Qu,and 26Qu in the end. They will reach third and second
position
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positions
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in 2030. In 1980, Nuclear, solar,and hydropower stood at 5
Qu
each. They will rise to 6qu, 4qu,and 4qu. Hydro-power is the lowest
uses
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use
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energy
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of energy
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on
this
chart.
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