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The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections untill 2030.

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections untill 2030.
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The graph provides data on a 2008 report about the consumption of
energy
 which was consumed in the USA between 1980,and 2030.
Overall
it is clear that
 petrol and oil were the
leader
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 of
energy
,
while
 coal and natural less popular than
pertol
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petrol
 and oil.
By contrast
, hydropower is the least
uses
Wrong verb form
used
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energy
.
To begin
 with, the consumption of petrol and oil stood at 35QU in 1980, which was the higher than
other
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others
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,
fluctuated
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and fluctuated
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 till 1995.
Then
 it will increase in 2030. Coal and natural gas started at 20Qu and 15Qu and crisscrossed and overlapped
untill
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until
 2020. They will increase 23Qu,and 26Qu in the end. They will reach third and second
position
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positions
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 in 2030. In 1980, Nuclear, solar,and hydropower stood at 5
Qu
 each. They will rise to 6qu, 4qu,and 4qu. Hydro-power is the lowest
uses
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energy
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of energy
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this
 chart.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, qu with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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