The bar charts show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates the number of graduate and postgraduate
students
in UK
who did not go into full-time Correct article usage
the UK
work
after leaving college did
in the year 2008. Unnecessary verb
apply
It is clear that
both graduate and postgraduate students
chose to study more whereas
fewer people
decided to do voluntary work
.
First of all, majority
of Correct article usage
the majority
students
rating
29,665 Wrong verb form
rated
people
chose their destination as further
studies in order to develop thier
skills to get well-paid job Correct your spelling
their
oppotunities
. It was followed by part-time Correct your spelling
opportunities
work
which 17,735 students
decided.
16,235 graduates chose to be unemployed as they thought having more experience and relaxing is more important than getting a job Change preposition
on.
while
only 3,500 people
went to do voluntary work
.
Similarly
the figure Add a comma
Similarly,
of
Change preposition
for
number
of postgraduate Change the article
a number
the number
students
also
displayed an almost similar pattern over the year. 2,725 students
decided to study more related to their course. Whereas
2,535 postgraduates made a choice to do part-time work
as they needed money before they get
employed. Followed by Wrong verb form
got
further
study and part-time work
, unemployment was in a
third position. 1,625 Correct article usage
apply
people
stayed unemployed while
only 345 postgraduates volunteered for work
in 2008.Submitted by wjddbs2206 on
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further, whereas, while".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, work, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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