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The three pie charts show the proportion of four kinds of vehicles used in the UK in at the start,. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The three pie charts show the proportion of four kinds of vehicles used in the UK in at the start,. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The presented pie charts compare data about how many people who lived in the UK used 4
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several
 transportation systems in 3 various times( 1965, 1985, and 2005).
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, it was important that the number of populations who used private ones, which was the best one, climbed
while
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 the
others
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precentages
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percentages
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reduces
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reduced
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 over the period of 40 years.
According to
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 the graph, at the start, Privet cars, which were the main type of transport, were 40%;
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 it had
15
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%
increas
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increase
 and in 2005, it reached 60%. In 1965,
Publich
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Public
 transport, the second thing, was
a
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apply
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exactely
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exactly
 a
quater
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quarter
;
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, it hit
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 in 1985 at 20%;
however
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, it jumped and became 22% in 2005. The diagrams demonstrate that the third item was Lorries and other
commercioal
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commercial
 vehicles;
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, it was constant in both 1965 and 1985 at 20% after that it declined to half of the previous figure. The
last
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 part was recreational vehicles
that
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 had 5% less than the prior thing and had
fashion like
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 the second
elements
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. Later it
got
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reached
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 the lowest mark in 1985 by 5%;
nevertheless
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, it leapt and touched 8% in 2005.
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