The chart below shows the percentage of the population in the UK who consumed the recommended daily amount of fruit and vegetables in 2002, 2006 and 2010.

The chart below shows the percentage of the population in the UK who consumed the recommended daily amount of fruit and vegetables in 2002, 2006 and 2010.
The given chart indicates the percentage of fruit and vegetables by three groups of people .
That is
men ,
women
and
children
.
Initially
, in 2002
women
are
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seen to
be having
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have
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the highest
consumption
of 25% and
the
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apply
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children
having
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the lowest
consumption
of 11%. In 2006 the
women
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women's
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consumption
rate was at its peak of 32%.In general that year, the population was higher as compared to 2002 and 2010.
Overall
,
women
have the highest
consumption
rate as compared to
the
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apply
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children
and men in the three years 2002, 2006
and2010
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and 2010
.
Children
on
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, on
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the other hand, have the lowest
consumption
of fruits and vegetables as compared to
women
and men respectively.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words women, children, consumption with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 3 times.
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