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The map below shows the development of the town of Stromer between 1995 and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The map below shows the development of the town of Stromer between 1995 and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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Demonstrated in the
map
 is the development of the town of Stromer.Currently versus how it was back in
the
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1995.
Overall
, it can
be clearly see
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 that the major change was the green part
in
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 the
map
. Aside from the
vaurious
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variety
 of facilities
had
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that had
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 to come,
Such
 as the school in the
center
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 and the shops
arround
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around
 it,
Also
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there Also
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 the
incresed
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increase
increased
 of apartments.
It
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 interesting to note
in
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 the 1995
map
show
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shows
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 vast
speaces
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spaces
species
 of forest and farmland,
However
 it shrink in the current
map
, In order to make the residential places
increased
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 in the
south
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southern
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erea
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area
.
Morever
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Moreover
, The other major
developement
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development
 in the city is the
persent
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presence
 of an
aripot
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airport
,which is in the
north west
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northwest
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 of the
map
. For sure the
goverment
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government
 of Stormer City
make
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made
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 huge progress in the city as the plan shows,More
fasilities
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facilities
 and
airpot
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airport
 with organized and
build
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built
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roades
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roads
streat
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street
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words map with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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