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The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The two charts display the layout of the Porth Habour in 2000 and what changes
are
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 made nowadays. The most obvious changes are that an extra dock is added to park more boats and a building for
cafe
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 and shops is constructed.
Beside
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 that, the layout of the whole
habour
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harbour
 basically remains, but the locations of some sites and facilities
has
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 been rearranged.
To begin
 with, the noticeable modifications are as
follow
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.
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First
, the originally disused castle at the southeast corner is transformed into a hotel.
Together with
this
, a nearby public beach is no longer open to everyone but only
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 the customers in the hotel.
Secondly
, a path leading to the hotel is built and it joins the road leading to the place where the lifeboats are parked.
Finally
, the two coves to park private yachts and fishing boats have their locations switched, with Marina in the south, and beside which a building for showers and toilets is situated. At
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 it is worth mentioning that the location of the public beach in the north
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 unchanged. Still, there are two car parks, with the smaller one connecting with the main road and the other one forking from the road leading to the lifeboats.
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task achievement
Your essay provides a generally complete response that includes the main features of both the past and present layouts. However, minor details could be more elaborated for a stronger response.
coherence cohesion
Use linking words more effectively to enhance the logical flow. For instance, words like 'moreover,' 'additionally,' or 'meanwhile' can add coherence. Be cautious with spelling and word choice for better clarity.
coherence cohesion
Consider organizing the changes into more distinct categories, such as infrastructure, facilities, and recreational areas, to improve clarity and support for main points.
task achievement
The essay identifies the main changes in the harbour layout effectively, such as the addition of a dock, the hotel, and the rearrangement of sites.
coherence cohesion
The introduction briefly but accurately frames the comparison between the harbour layouts in 2000 and today.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harbour (or harbor)
  • docks
  • shipping lanes
  • warehouses
  • recreational areas
  • infrastructure
  • additions
  • removals
  • facilities
  • environmental sustainability
  • economic impact
  • local community
  • capacity
  • technological advancements
  • industrial shipping
  • recreational use
  • surrounding infrastructure
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