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The table below shows the percentage of the population and the types of houses they live in 3 areas of a city. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the percentage of the population and the types of houses they live in 3 areas of a city. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The presented table compares data about 4 several types of residential places that the figure of inhabitants who live in 3 various districts of
one
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 city .
Overall
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, it is important that all regions have roughly the same communities;
moreover
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, most of them choose Apartments for accommodations.
According to
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 the chart, most of the people who live in the Central
area
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, the main region with the highest population at 32,100, prefer to live in Detached at 39%;
then
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 semi-detached
has
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apply
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about 10% less than the first
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one
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after that, terraced and flat respectively has 18 and 15 per cent. South
Area
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, the second
one
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, has 100 persons less than the prior;
furthermore
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, Terraced by 56% is the best selection of people who live in
this
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area
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;
thereafter
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, flat is approximately half of the
last
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one
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. Later Dateched and semi-Datched have 14% and 5%. The picture demonstrates that the
area
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 with a smaller population is the Green Park
area
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 which is 31,700.
In addition
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, in
this
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 zone the number of people
designate
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 apartments for living by 76%, the next item is Terraces with a percentage
that is
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 absolutely equal to the South
area
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 Detached; not only Semi-detached but
also
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 Detached have the same proportion of 5%.
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