The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarise the information by selecting a reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarise the information by selecting a reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the report of telephone calls in
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the Britain
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Britain Area
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British area
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. It
divides
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divided
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into three variances about local, national and international, and
mobiles
in 1995-2002. The bar chart
demostrates
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demonstrates
the local fixed
begin
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begins
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in the highest place around 70 billion. It rises gently from 1995-1999,
Nevertheless
,
this
fixed line declines from 88 to almost 70
billions
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billion
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in 2000 until 2002.
However
, domestic and global
and
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apply
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handphone is
smaller
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a smaller
the smaller
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number of calls than
local
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the local
a local
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telephone
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telephones
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.
Although
, they grow considerably year by year, starting
almost
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at almost
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40 billion for national and international and around 2 billion for
mobiles
. Domestic and global calls
reach
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reached
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a peak
almost
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of almost
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60
billions
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billion
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,
while
mobiles
hit a maximum 40 numbers of calls in 2002.
Overall
, the
mobiles
are the lowest and the local fixed line is the highest telephone calls. The
mobiles
and national and international are increasing steadily
in
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apply
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every year.
However
,
domestic
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the domestic
a domestic
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call is fluctuating from 1995-2022.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words mobiles with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number of minutes
  • telephone calls
  • categories
  • local – fixed line
  • national and international – fixed line
  • mobiles
  • general trend
  • yearly totals
  • significant changes
  • milestones
  • data
  • rise significantly
  • decline
  • steady increase
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • exponential growth
  • over the period
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