The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarise the information by selecting a reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the report of telephone calls in
Correct article usage
the Britain
Britain Area
. It Replace the word
British area
divides
into three variances about local, national and international, and Wrong verb form
divided
mobiles
in 1995-2002.
The bar chart demostrates
the local fixed Correct your spelling
demonstrates
begin
in the highest place around 70 billion. It rises gently from 1995-1999, Correct subject-verb agreement
begins
Nevertheless
, this
fixed line declines from 88 to almost 70 billions
in 2000 until 2002. Change to singular
billion
However
, domestic and global and
handphone is Correct word choice
apply
smaller
number of calls than Add an article
a smaller
the smaller
local
Add an article
the local
a local
telephone
. Fix the agreement mistake
telephones
Although
, they grow considerably year by year, starting almost
40 billion for national and international and around 2 billion for Change preposition
at almost
mobiles
. Domestic and global calls reach
a peak Wrong verb form
reached
almost
60 Change preposition
of almost
billions
, Change to singular
billion
while
mobiles
hit a maximum 40 numbers of calls in 2002.
Overall
, the mobiles
are the lowest and the local fixed line is the highest telephone calls. The mobiles
and national and international are increasing steadily in
every year. Change preposition
apply
However
, domestic
call is fluctuating from 1995-2022.Add an article
the domestic
a domestic
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words mobiles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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