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According to certain studies, despite unprecedented growth in the international trade, poor nations have not been able to get the benefits of globalization. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Globalization has indeed transformed international trade, fostering economic growth and development.
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, I agree that poorer
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 have not fully benefited from it. Despite
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 global expansion, several factors hinder these
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 from reaping
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 full rewards.
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, structural inequalities between developed and developing
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 play a significant role. Wealthier
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, with better infrastructure, technology, and capital, are more equipped to exploit globalization's opportunities. Poorer
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 often remain dependent on exporting raw materials or low-value products, limiting their economic growth.
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, multinational corporations frequently exploit
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 and resources in developing
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.
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 providing jobs, these corporations often pay low wages and repatriate profits to their home
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.
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 exploitation perpetuates inequality, as the wealth generated in poor
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 benefits wealthier economies.
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, environmental degradation is a significant issue. Many poor
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 lack regulations to protect their natural resources, leading to deforestation, pollution, and long-term economic damage.
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, unsustainable mining practices in parts of Africa have caused significant environmental harm without commensurate economic gains.
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, global trade policies are often biased in
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 of developed
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. Tariffs and trade barriers can limit the ability of poorer
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 to compete fairly, reinforcing their dependence on low-value exports.
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 some developing
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, like China and India, have benefited from globalization, many poorer
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 remain marginalized. Until these inequalities are addressed, globalization’s full potential will remain out of reach for them.

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