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The chart shows Australian home Internet use by reasons and age groups. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows Australian home Internet use by reasons and age groups. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart describes the various causes and
age
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 groups using
Australian
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the Australian
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 home
internet
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.
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, Emailing is placed
the
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 first position to
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use
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internet
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the internet
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while
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 most teenagers are using
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the internet
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internet
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 for social networking. In detail, it can
seen
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see
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 that
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age
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the age
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 group of 15-24, which
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uses
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internet
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the internet
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 for social networking, at around 80%,
whereas
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they
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apply
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paying
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pay
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 bills
through
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apply
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online is the least amount of using
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internet
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the internet
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 than other
age
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 groups.
Paying
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When paying
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 bills online,
25
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the 25
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-34
age
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 group
is
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has
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 the highest percentage of using
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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 than other
age
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 groups, which is around 60%, surprisingly, social networking and emailing, these
both
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apply
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have the same amount of using
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the internet
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internet
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, which is almost 80%.
In contrast
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,
above
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those above
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 the
age
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 group of 65,
using
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use
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 the highest proportion of
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internet
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Internet
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 for emailing, which is around 80 per cent but they
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use
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lowest
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the lowest
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 amount of
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internet
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Internet
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 for social networking and online banking, at 20% and 40% respectively.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, internet with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • predominant
  • usage patterns
  • highlighting variations
  • compare and contrast
  • primary reasons
  • identify differences
  • age brackets
  • usage purposes
  • popularity
  • online shopping
  • banking
  • Internet use
  • age groups
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