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The table shows the average number of vehicles per hour on two roads during the week. The pie charts show the proportion of different types of transportation using each road.

The table shows the average number of vehicles per hour on two roads during the week. The pie charts show the proportion of different types of transportation using each road.
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pie chart and the table
depicts
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 information which was achieved by assessing traffic on two roads in
the
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one hour and
shows
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show
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 what
vehickles
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vehicles
vehicle
 types were used and
reasons
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the reasons
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of
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for
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 driving.
Overall
, the majority of items consist of cars and LRT and the main
reason
of
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 the
roads
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 usage was commuting. Looking at the pie chart, almost the half number
ot
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of
 transport was cars with 45
percentage
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. The second place of popularity took Light Rail Transit, which had 10
percentage
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 less number than cars. Other types of
vehickles
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vehicles
such
 as buses and
taxi
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taxis
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 were not so popular and had 10
percentage
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per cent
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 each. The mentioned
tabel
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table
 shows, that the most frequent
reason
 for driving was the trip to work and back. People said that it was the
reason
of
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55
percentage
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for
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 using
car
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the car
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 in the city. Less popular was the cause of business with 45
percentage
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 and 5
percentage
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 less was the
reason
taking
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 children to school. Other causes had
exectly
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exactly
 the same
percentage
 equals
to
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Vocabulary: Replace the words reason, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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