The chart shows Australian home Internet use by reasons and age groups. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows Australian home Internet use by reasons and age groups.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar charts compare the
Internet
usage of individuals
according to
a few
age
categories and reasons for accessing the
internet
such
as social media, paying bills, and sending e-mails.
Overall
,
it is clear that
most users accessed the
internet
for emailing
purpose
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purposes
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and the opposite for social media. Looking at social media usage, 100% of teenagers (18-25) preferred mostly to use the
internet
for texting and calling.
And the
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The
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preference dropped dramatically when the
age
group increased and reached a value of approximately 30% in the above category. Around 70% of people belonging to all
age
groups did email and approximately 50% and just above 40% used the technology for settling bills online and entertainment, respectively. Surprisingly,
on the other hand
, data relating to paying bills and e-mailing followed the same trend. Both
overall
increased the value slightly with slight fluctuations, starting from exactly 60% in the teenager group (18-25) and
grew
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growing
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to just below 80% in the middle
age
(40-60)
and
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apply
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dropping by 10% and
elevated
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elevating
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to 80% in the above section.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Vocabulary: Replace the words internet, age with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • predominant
  • usage patterns
  • highlighting variations
  • compare and contrast
  • primary reasons
  • identify differences
  • age brackets
  • usage purposes
  • popularity
  • online shopping
  • banking
  • Internet use
  • age groups
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